IELTS Writing 7 - Task 2
IELTS Writing Strategy
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
Some people believe that computers are more a hindrance than a help in today's world. Others feel that they are such indispensable tools that they would not be able to live or work without them.
In what ways are computers a hindrance? What is your opinion?
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
Candidate answer
The advanced 'Mind machines' so called 'the Computers' are no doubt the best products of latest technology. One cannot imagine the advancement of life and Sciences without these machines.
But like other achievements; they have their own good and bad effects as seen with experience and passage of time. In my opinion they are good if used for educational and beneficial uses for health and living etc.
Basically twentieth century had been famous for its latest Computer techniques and their application on our lives. Data shown on Computers help us to assess how much education is conducted through this media. The assessment ways as well as examinations are improved. Moreover, personal skills of reading and writing are far more improved through Computers.
Moreover Science and technology progressed immensely with computers. Researchers like cloning and transplants are only possible with modern computerized skills.
Good question comes to one's mind... where will this Computer would take us next?? Certainly no one knows! We might explore new planners. Maybe we will buy houses on Moon, Mars or Jupiter. Or we might lose our own identity. One cannot forget the end of 2000 millennium when everybody was in chaos to think what will happen if the computers crash? The aeroplanes were going to crash and the trains would colloid. That Show we are forced to think that one should not be dependent on these machines after all we are humans. We are here to command computers not them to order us.
(247 words)
Examiner's comments
This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 5 score. Here is the examiner's comment:
The candidate has attempted to organize some good arguments with valid examples and complex ideas. There is some relevant vocabulary (cloning) and synonyms avoid repetition (bad effects v hindrance, good effects v help). However, the arguments in paragraph 3 are not clear and the 'against' arguments are contained in the final paragraph, with no separate conclusion. There are frequent grammatical inaccuracies.