IELTS Writing Sample #178
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic.
Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines.
Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
You should write at least 250 words.
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Sample Band 9 answer
The question of whether we should oblige
parents to immunise their children against common diseases is a social rather than
a medical one. Since we are free to choose what we eat or drink or how much exercise
we take, why should the medical treatment we decide to undergo be any different?
(Introduction poses a new question to introduce the topic)
Medical researchers and governments are
primarily interested in overall statistics and trends and in money-saving schemes,
which fail to take into consideration the individual's concerns and rights. While
immunisation against diseases such as tetanus and whooping cough may be effective,
little information is released about the harmful effects of vaccinations, which
can sometimes result in growth problems in children or even death.
(Concessional argument)
The body is designed to resist disease
and to create its own natural immunity through contact with that disease. When children
are given artificial immunity, we create a vulnerable society, which is entirely
dependent on immunisation. In the event that mass immunisation programmes were to
cease, the society as a whole would be more at risk than ever before.
(Writer's opinion stated plainly and forcefully-as fact)
In addition there is the issue of the
rights of the individual. As members of a society, why should we be obliged to subject
our children to this potentially harmful practice? Some people may also be against
immunisation on religious grounds and their needs must be considered when any decisions
are made.
(Main idea with supporting arguments)
For these reasons I feel strongly that
immunisation programmes should not be obligatory and that the individual should
have the right to choose whether or not to participate.
(Personal opinion to sum up. Re-statement of original
question in own words.)
(254 words)