Academic Writing Sample Task 1 #46
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The take below gives information
about the underground railway systems in six cities.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make
comparisons where relevant.
You should write at least 150 words.
| Underground Railways Systems |
| City | Date opened | Kilometres of route |
Passengers per year (in millions) |
| London | 1863 | 394 | 775 |
| Paris | 1900 | 199 | 1191 |
| Tokyo | 1927 | 155 | 1927 |
| Washington DC | 1976 | 126 | 144 |
| Kyoto | 1981 | 11 | 45 |
| Los Angeles | 2001 | 28 | 50 |
Model answer
The table shows the details regarding the underground railway systems in six
cities.
London has the oldest underground railway systems among the six cities. It was opened
in the year 1863, and it is already lye years old. Paris is the second oldest, in
which it was opened in the year 1900. This was then followed by the opening of the
railway systems in Tokyo, Washington DC and Kyoto. Los Angeles has the newest underground
railway system, and was only opened in the year 2001. In terms of the size of the
railway systems, London, For certain, has the largest underground railway systems.
It has 394 kilometres of route in total, which is nearly twice as large as the system
in Paris. Kyoto, in contrast, has the smallest system. It only has 11 kilometres
of route, which is more than 30 times less than that of London.
Interestingly, Tokyo, which only has 155 kilometres of route, serves the greatest
number of passengers per year, at 1927 millions passengers. The system in Paris
has the second greatest number of passengers, at 1191 millions passengers per year.
The smallest underground railway system, Kyoto, serves the smallest number of passengers
per year as predicted.
In conclusion, the underground railway systems in different cities vary a lot in
the site of the system, the number of passengers served per year and in the age
of the system.
(233 words)
Examiners comment
This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 7 score.
This answer selects and describes the information well. Key features
are clearly identified, while unexpected differences are highlighted and
illustrated. The answer is relevant and accurate with a clear overview.
Information is well-organised using a good range of signals and link words.
These are generally accurate and appropriate, although occasional errors
occur.
The writer successfully uses some less common words. There is a clear awareness
of style but there are occasional inaccuracies and there is some repetition.
Grammar is well-controlled and sentences are varied and generally accurate
with only minor errors.